Umm could yall tell me what u think
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Jahn- *They run quickly and nimbly from the three guards chasing them, they look back and forth pulling their black cape hood back onto their large feline ears. *
Guard #1- Hey you come back here!!! *slowing from exhaustion*
Guard #2- Split up!! *Hes out of breath and falling behind*
Jahn- *jumps up onto a dumpster and then a roof then continues to jump on the line of buildings* *slightly smirks and cackles a little* (that was a close shave with the royal guard almost immediately I had just snuck into the kingdom) *spots a doorway and slips in*
Guard #3- Guys they’re gone *pulls off helmet and shows her long wavy brown hair* (How does this person run so quickly? They looked shady before but now they’re quite suspicious we might need to look into this.)
Jahn-*Looks around and spots a wardrobe full of royal butlers and maids' uniforms. * (Am I in the Castle already!? Wait- I can use this as an opportunity but I need to hide my ears a butler's outfit won't work)
Jahn- *looks back at maid uniform* What luck *puts on a maid's long dress and hides his tail. They then hide their ears under his bonnet successfully hiding them* (This seems to have good chance of succeeding.) *folds up the clothes they were wearing and shoves them under the wardrobe*
Servant- *walks in* Oh I'm so sorry ma’am I'll leave I didn’t see anyone walk in
Jahn- your just fine hon, I'm finished I'll go instead (That was close!) *bows a little*
Jahn- *walks out quickly* (Wow! I just stepped out of the servants' quarters and the castle is this expensive looking) *looks around and notices a table with a vase on it *Picks up and puts vase down* (So now I need to just find the kings room)
Jahn- *Walks up and down the halls till he spots a guard by a door* (ill just pretend that I belong here) Hello sir may I enter I'd like to tidy up
Guard- um yes ma’am *slightly stuttering* *opens door*
Jahn- Thank you sir *Bows and smiles slightly* (I can't believe that this is working so well) *Walks in and looks Around* *Starts to notice it’s a bedroom* (wait- who's room would need guarding) *gets startled as he hears someone talking outside* tries to quickly put down the paper he was looking at
Claude- Excuse me *he says softly*
Guard- *he doesn't speak but instead opens the door and look down*
Claude- Thank you (Not surprised, no one ever speaks to me) *walks in and notices a maid looking at him like a deer in front of a carriage*
Jahn- *Staring kind of blankly* (THIS IS THE PRINCES ROOM!?! Wow he’s pretty mousy) U-um hello hi I was just uh- cleaning? *hiding the paper behind his back*
Claude- (what she’s talking to me? Must be new here but wait- she's talking to me!!) Oh, hello continue to do what you were doing, and I noticed you looking at my studies though I don’t suppose you can read can you?
Jahn- I can read (oops- I shouldn’t have said most of the people in this kingdom can’t read) *They add* I'm self-taught I've read books I quite enjoy poetry and plays.
Claude- Really? *he says excitedly* (Ive never met somebody who actually speaks with me about what they like) Do you like A midwinters daze?!
Jahn- Ive read it but Ive never gotten to see it preformed (What is going on here?!?) *Sets paper down and walks towards the door slowly*
Claude- Hey wait please don’t leave (No! we’ve just started talking) *He grabs Jahn's hand and then trips* *they knock heads together* I'm so sorr- So- sorry *stutters and then just stares*
Jahn-*they rub their head and then realize their bonnet fell off. * (Cr ap- Hes seeing my ears) *Grabs bonnet from floor and shoves it back onto his ears* so now what
Claude- *Just plain confusion* wait you're a demi-human, but you’ve haven't tried to eat me? *He is now considering his whole life is a lie*
Jahn- *shocked* wait, eat you? *bursts out laughing* Where'd you hear that nonsense.
Claude- (I thought it was just common knowledge) *He is now embarrassed* I was wrong? They teach everyone demi-humans are monsters.
Jahn- And you believed them *slightly shocked* (this guy is either gullible or all of the humans think this.) *he stands and offers his hand to Claude, a peace offering. *
But Karen, I took the chain back yesterday because I needed it.
Then Karen realized that her Mum already used the chain. So, Mum did not understand what the girls are worried about.
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It's great, if you turn this into a book, can you please tell me the title because, I want to buy 4 copies : )
Kate was correct on her opinion.
First of all Karen should ask her Mum permission to use her chain. Doing that will not have problem in using it. So, after all, the dialogue with her Mum was a must.
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